又看你的留言. 我突然想, 题目该改.

谢谢小幺.
梦文对不起了. 你的英文也得改了.
谁让你是翻译家呢.

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下面是引用小幺于2005-08-19 07:46发表的:
这个写落叶的角度满独特的:)

梦文的英文译得也美~
一点小建议, 注意时态;
还有最后的那个"收件人", recipient是不是更合适,
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问你好!

周末又到了, 又可以睡懒觉啦.哈哈!

祝你过个开心周末!

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下面是引用小幺于2005-08-19 07:46发表的:
这个写落叶的角度满独特的:)

梦文的英文译得也美~
一点小建议, 注意时态;
还有最后的那个"收件人", recipient是不是更合适,
.......

这是我瞎写着玩的, 象日记一样.

不好意思.

不过你喜欢, 我挺高兴的!

谢谢你的翻译!

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下面是引用梦文于2005-08-18 21:27发表的:



Hi, Rose, 我很喜欢你这首诗，很美，很深刻。下面是我的试译，请指正。 谢谢！ 祝你快乐！。  

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这个写落叶的角度满独特的:)

梦文的英文译得也美~
一点小建议, 注意时态;
还有最后的那个"收件人", recipient是不是更合适,
我总觉得receiver是个machine. 当然我可能是对这词儿理解不够.

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下面是引用Rose Lu于2005-08-05 18:29发表的【原创】今日我开着车:
今日我开着车

冰花

今日我开着车
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Hi, Rose, 我很喜欢你这首诗，很美，很深刻。下面是我的试译，请指正。 谢谢！ 祝你快乐！。  

FALLING LEAVES IN MIDSUMMER
- by Rose Lu

Today I drive my car
Passing through a small street
The fallen leaves floating and swaying
Like rain flying down

I apprehend, and see
They are all sorrowful
Being used to the standing-high
Greened, shaded lives
Perhaps they really don’t wanna get down

Leaf by leaf sweeping outside the window glasses
I don’t know why my tears run down like streams
Suddenly the corners of my mouth have a taste of
Dense salty and acerbity

The falling down that every leaf has to experience
There is no exception that can one escape
The today’s sadness is
They didn’t fall in the autumn as they should
But in the hotness of the summer

The pitiful leaves die untimely
I send them a song
But the recipient of the song
Yet becomes myself