Sometimes I don't know why 非马老师修改,LING和诗OKOKOK

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02/08/2007

修改 by 非马

Sometimes I don't know why

BY Bing Hua

Sometimes I don't know why

I just feel so sad

I wish someone could read my mind

Come and stop by my side



Sometimes I don't know why

I just feel so confined

I wish someone could share my feelings

Come and ferry me out of this island



Sometimes I don't know why

I just feel so upset

I wish someone could understand my heart

Come and give me a hand


I hope you are that someone
my sweet dream in the distant land


(草稿)

第一次TRY英文的, 请大家给改改:


Sometimes I don't know why

BY ROSE LU

Sometimes I don't know why

I just feel so sad

I wish someone could read my mind

Come and stop by my side



Sometimes I don't know why

I just feel so confined

I wish someone could share my feelings

Come and ferry me out of this island



Sometimes I don't know why

I just feel so upset

I wish someone could understand my heart

Come and give me a hand



I hope that you are the someone

my sweet dreamer in the distant land



灵(LING!1984)的版本:

Sometimes I don't know why

I just feel so sad and despite

I wish someone could read my mind

Come and stop by my side


Sometimes I don't know why

I just feel so confined and shy

I wish someone could share my feelings

Come and ferry me out of this tide


Sometimes I don't know why

I just feel so upset and dislike

I wish someone could understand my heart

Come and give me a hand with a smile

I hope you are that someone

my sweet dream in the distant land day and night

*I know why* 和一首

I know why sometimes

you feel so sad

As no one could read your mind

Come and stop by your side



I know why sometimes

you feel so lonely

As no one could share your feelings

Come and accompany at your side



I know why sometimes

you feel so upset

As no one could understand your heart

Come and give you a hand



I am sure someday someone will catch your eyes

Your sweet dreamer in the distant land

哈哈!不错!

不过你是所答非所问呀. 俺是让你给挑毛病, 和改改我的原草稿.KIDDING!

引用

下面是引用Rose Lu于2005-08-06 17:31发表的:
俺是让你给挑毛病, 和改改我的原草稿.KIDDING!

我的英文只有中学水平，也就是换个主谓宾主动变被动什么的。。。哪有挑毛病的水平啊。。。只是喜欢凑个热闹。。。嘻嘻。。。

留这个任务给其他的高手吧。。。

虽然我的英文是小学水平……
Rose Lu，偶看懂了一点点

呵呵，我的英语就幼儿园的水平。一点点也看不懂啊！

你们干麻都这么谦虚呀.

我要去UNDERGROUND啦.

Sometimes I don't know why

BY ROSE LU

Sometimes I don't know why

I just feel so sad

I wish someone could read my mind

Come and stop by my side

不知道为什么
有时我是如此的哀伤
渴望有人解读我的思绪
陪伴在我的身旁



Sometimes I don't know why

I just feel so confined

I wish someone could share my feelings

Come and ferry me out of this island

不知道为什么
有时我感到如同被囚
渴望有人懂得我的感觉
渡我出孤岛



Sometimes I don't know why

I just feel so upset

I wish someone could understand my heart

Come and give me a hand

不知道为什么
有时我感到是如此的担忧
渴望有人懂得我的心情
把我丞救

I hope that you are the someone

my sweet dreamer in the distant land

多么希望你是那个人
我甜蜜而遥远的梦想

引用

下面是引用Rose Lu于2005-08-06 13:22发表的【原创】Sometimes I don't know why (草稿):
第一次TRY英文的, 请大家给改改:

Sometimes I don't know why

.......

Hi, Rose, I’m glad to see your first English poem. It’s a great poem. 第一次就写这么好，了不起！     我虽然算“高手”，也没有看出毛病。 嘿嘿，玩笑。 我也不是高手。

问小澜，moonpie 好。 你们玩好。

梦文你好.

久违啦. 你是高手高手.

有高手夸我高兴!

引用

下面是引用梦文于2005-08-09 20:57发表的:

Hi, Rose, I’m glad to see your first English poem. It’s a great poem. 第一次就写这么好，了不起！     我虽然算“高手”，也没有看出毛病。 嘿嘿，玩笑。 我也不是高手。

问小澜，moonpie 好。 你们玩好。

（韩式问候） 梦文前辈 （按注册先后），您好！
（日式问候） 初次见面，请多多关照。。。。

（中式问候） 在梦里都可以行文如流水，您一定是个高高高手，佩服佩服

Rose 你好，我不是高手，你却是大诗人。你现在又一开始就写作么好的英文诗，你有大大的前途。 祝你成为中英双语的大诗人！

引用

下面是引用小澜于2005-08-17 17:53发表的:



（韩式问候） 梦文前辈 （按注册先后），您好！
（日式问候） 初次见面，请多多关照。。。。
.......

小澜 你好。 哇赛，你会三国话，佩服佩服！ 见到你的回帖真高兴。 我不是高手，但是听到你的好话还是很舒服, 哈哈。 喜欢你的头像！

引用

下面是引用梦文于2005-08-18 07:44发表的:



小澜 你好。 哇赛，你会三国话，佩服佩服！ 见到你的回帖真高兴。 我不是高手，但是听到你的好话还是很舒服, 哈哈。 喜欢你的头像！

.......

嘻嘻。。。谢谢你的夸奖。。。
你是第二个说喜欢我的头像的人。。。如果没有记错的话。。。

引用

下面是引用小澜于2005-08-18 12:03发表的:


嘻嘻。。。谢谢你的夸奖。。。
你是第二个说喜欢我的头像的人。。。如果没有记错的话。。。

所以也只能是第二，还说高高高手呢，唉！  



祝你  

引用

下面是引用梦文于2005-08-18 19:37发表的:


所以也只能是第二，还说高高高手呢，唉！  


.......

二是两个一的意思，也就是说你是两个并列第一，所以是高高手。。。嘻嘻。

引用

下面是引用小澜于2005-08-19 19:24发表的:


二是两个一的意思，也就是说你是两个并列第一，所以是高高手。。。嘻嘻。

哈哈，你真会说。我是并列第一，就是说还有希望，真高兴，呵呵！
祝你开心！

引用

引用第0楼冰花于08-06-2005 12:22发表的“【原创】Sometimes I don't know why (草稿)”:
第一次TRY英文的, 请大家给改改:


I hope that you are the someone

my sweet dreamer in the distant land

.......

冰花第一次出手便有这样的成绩，实在令人高兴。

最后两行也许可改成：

I hope you are that someone
my sweet dream in the distant land

冰花   我的想法如下：

Sometimes I don't know why

I just feel so sad and despite

I wish someone could read my mind

Come and stop by my side


Sometimes I don't know why

I just feel so confined and shy

I wish someone could share my feelings

Come and ferry me out of this tide


Sometimes I don't know why

I just feel so upset and dislike

I wish someone could understand my heart

Come and give me a hand with a smile

I hope you are that someone

my sweet dream in the distant land day and night

冰花，我的想法是这样：

太完美了，我都没法下手了。