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有一种爱


There’s a Kind of Love


By Rose Lu(Binghua) Tr. East Sea Fairy



有一种爱
There’s a kind of love
折叠起来
That is, once folded up,
整洁美观
So neat and nice
永远不需要打开
That it never needs to be spread out.


有一种爱
There’s a kind of love
带着缺陷
Flawed,
却韵味如酿
Yet tastes as sweet as Bacchus’s fruitful fluid
魅力无限
With never-ending glamour.

有一种爱
There’s a kind of love,
离你很远
Far apart,
又感觉就在身边
Yet you feel it’s just at your side
无声地牵挂
With muted cares
默契地祝愿
Wishing as if with your mind

有一种爱
There’s a kind of love
让你灵感如泉
That lets your inspirations spring like a bubbling spring
令你天份实现
To make your talents fully display
叫你容光闪闪
And your glow
使你的生命放出异彩
Glow with extraordinary splendor.

有一种爱
There’s a kind of love
是思念不能负载
For which you may yearn but can not load
有疼说不出来
You may feel its unspeakably pain, yet
却让你终生无悔无怨
Will live all your life without complaint or regret.

There’s a Kind of Love


By Rose Lu(Bing hua) Tr. East Sea Fairy



There’s a kind of love
That is, once folded up,
So neat and nice
That it never needs to be spread out.


There’s a kind of love
Flawed,
Yet tastes as sweet as Bacchus’s fruitful fluid
With never-ending glamour.

There’s a kind of love,
Far apart,
Yet you feel it’s just at your side
With muted cares
Wishing as if with your mind


There’s a kind of love
That lets your inspirations spring like a bubbling spring
To make your talents fully display
And your glow
Glow with extraordinary splendor.

There’s a kind of love
For which you may yearn but can not load
You may feel its unspeakably pain, yet
Will live all your life without complaint or regret.

修改后:

There’s a Kind of Love


There’s a kind of love
once it is folded up,
So neat and nice
It never needs to be spread out.

There’s a kind of love
Flawed,
Yet tastes as sweet as wine
With boundless charm.

There’s a kind of love,
Far apart,
Yet you feel it’s just right at your side
With muted cares
And secret wishes.

There’s a kind of love
That lets your inspirations rise like a bubbling spring
It makes you realize your potential
Your face shining
And your life glow with extraordinary splendor.

There’s a kind of love
A longing that you can never bear
You may feel its unspeakable pain
Yet will live all your life without complaints or regrets

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